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Post by mariii on Sept 7, 2014 12:21:49 GMT -5
Hi there, everybody! So, this is Mari here with a little something that you'll need in order to sign up for "In My Hands 2!" Before you say something like, "Wait, but... Mari! I thought you said IMH 2 isn't starting until later in the school year," you're completely right about that. However, signing up for IMH 2 isn't going to be nearly as easy as signing up for IMH was. Nope, you're not just going to fill out a form and be done with it. I'll need to see a written example of your work before you are allowed to fill out your form.
You're probably thinking, "But, Mari, you've already seen my work!" Sorry, but you'll still need to submit a written example, regardless of your post count or how well I know you. That means everybody will need to submit one. No exceptions! Now, you're probably thinking, "Yeah, that's easy. I'll just grab one of my old roleplay posts!" Nope, it's not that easy. Why don't you read through the requirements before passing judgment on whether or not this will be easy?
Requirements:
1. The written example must be at least 250 words long.
2. The written example must be in third-person and the character involved or being roleplayed must be one of the characters you wish to submit for "In My Hands 2."
3. Other characters from "In My Hands" may be used with the creator's permission. Before anyone asks about my characters, they may be used as long as they stay in-character.
4. The written example must be written to one of these prompts. Any prompts with an "A" are Communicator-only prompts and any prompts with a "B" are Team Eternity-only prompts. Be sure to read them all carefully:
[center][i][font face="Courgette"]1A. Write about one of your character's favorite moments from before he or she discovered that he or she was a Communicator.[/font][/i][/center]
[center][i][font face="Courgette"]1B. Write about one of your character's favorite moments from before he or she joined Team Eternity.[/font][/i][/center]
[center][i][font face="Courgette"]2A. Write about how your character found his or her Soul Container.[/font][/i][/center]
[center][i][font face="Courgette"]2B. Write about how and why your character joined Team Eternity.[/font][/i][/center]
[center][i][font face="Courgette"]3A. Write about your character's biggest regret from before he or she met the other Communicators.[/font][/i][/center]
[center][i][font face="Courgette"]3B. Write about your character's biggest regret from before he or she joined Team Eternity.[/font][/i][/center]
[center][i][font face="Courgette"]4. Write about your character's biggest dream about the future.[/font][/i][/center]
[center][i][font face="Courgette"]5. Write a death scene for your character.[/font][/i][/center]
5. The prompt of choice must be copied and pasted at the very top of the thread. Just copy and post what you see, including the brackets and codes.
6. Be sure to take this seriously! You only get five chances.
7. Keep things appropriate, please!
Important Information:
Please don't reply to this thread with your written example. Make your own thread and title it with your Marriland username! You will either be PMed on Marriland or IMed on Skype privately with feedback within a week of the submission. If a week has passed and you have not yet received feedback, please PM me privately. Also, note that you only need one written sample, even if you are going to create more than one character.
What I'm Looking For:
I will read your piece and give it a score of 0-5, depending on how many of the following five pieces it follows. If your score is lower than five, I will NOT tell you your errors, just your score. You MUST get at least four points, including the point for the piece on spelling and grammar to join "In My Hands 2." Most of my examples should be five-point examples, but some might be four-point examples if I was writing when I was tired or something.
Demonstrates proper usage of spelling and grammar. [1 point]
Demonstrates roleplaying experience. [1 point]
Follows all criteria listed. [1 point]
Flows well and gives a general idea of the character. [1 point]
Addresses the prompt. [1 point]
Wait... so am I in or Not?
When getting your feedback, either Aera or myself will send you a pre-written message. If it says that you are eligible for In My Hands 2, that means you are in and you may now post your form. Otherwise, please edit your sample.
So, anyways, good luck and have fun! I look forward to reading what you guys write!
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Sept 7, 2014 12:51:59 GMT -5
Post by mariii on Sept 7, 2014 12:51:59 GMT -5
ExamplesSome of you probably have no clue where the heck you should start with this, right? Well, never fear! I'm currently working on some examples. I'll try to make one example for each prompt, but note that I'm a busy girl, so I can't really make any promises! T a b l e O f C o n t e n t s1A. Ivy1B. Hazel2A. Virginia2B. Akarui3A. Alex3B. Ashburn
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Sept 7, 2014 15:25:39 GMT -5
Post by mariii on Sept 7, 2014 15:25:39 GMT -5
Author's Note: This example really seems like it sort of comes out of the blue, but I really couldn't think of anything. So, if you can write something better, that'd probably be best. After all, I really just pulled this example together within fifteen minutes. 1A. Write about one of your character's favorite moments from before he or she discovered that he or she was a Communicator. The shrill giggle of a nine-year-old girl lightly floated through the forest as Ivy Liu called, “I found you!” The fourteen-year-old had a hand on her younger sister’s head, her eyes shining with joy and excitement. The two sisters were playing Hide-and-Seek, as they often did whenever they had time. Both girls were homeschooled as Ivy had been bullied in school, so the two of them often had time to fool around after the day’s lessons. “You know, Willow, hiding behind a tree isn’t always the best idea! Besides, you always hide here!” Ivy exclaimed. By her feet, Ivy’s Glaceon, Snow, nodded in agreement, an arrogant smirk pasted on the Ice-type Pokémon’s face. “It’s not like you always have the best hiding places, Ivy! I’m not the one who decided to hide by the river and ended up with thirteen mosquito bites!” Willow replied, trying to glare at her older sister angrily. As she always did when she tried to act angry at her sister, though, Willow quickly dissolved into a fit of giggles. Before Ivy knew what was happening, she was giggling uncontrollably, too. Snow only glanced up at the two girls with the unspoken question of “Are you two crazy?” clearly visible in her eyes. “What are we even laughing about?” Ivy finally stopped laughing to ask. Willow glanced at her sister and shrugged, before continuing to giggle. Ivy blinked at Snow for a few moments before she, too, dissolved into laughter once more. Little did the two girls realize that their lives were about to change forever. |
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Sept 7, 2014 17:13:28 GMT -5
Post by mariii on Sept 7, 2014 17:13:28 GMT -5
Author's Note: I'm not really sure where I was going with this one, but I think I was trying to write out the first time Hazel ever met Ash. I don't even know. 1B. Write about one of your character's favorite moments from before he or she joined Team Eternity. Duchess Hazel Brown's smile was contagious as she flitted around the room, darting here and there as she finished last-minute preparations for the feast that she would be holding later that day. Ever since the previous duke and duchess, Hazel's parents, had died twelve years ago, Brown Manor had been an extremely quiet place. With Hazel now old enough to take charge, though, she planned to make Brown Manor into a brighter, happier place. Hazel had to admit, though. She was extremely nervous about the whole thing. She had never hosted a party before; nor had she ever attended one, so it felt rather strange to be suddenly taking on so much responsibility. The doorbell chimed softly and Hazel glanced up, surprised that a guest would arrive this early. There were still two hours until the official start of the feast. Nevertheless, Hazel quickly put on her hostess-smile and hurried towards the front door, opening it to reveal a handsome young man who returned her smile with a swift nod and a polite, but seemingly forced, smile. "Please come in." Hazel murmured softly, gesturing towards the inside of the manor. "It's wonderful to meet you, Duchess Brown. I am Count Ashburn Nien." the man said silkily as he bowed. Hazel smiled as he raised her hand to his lips, his lips lightly brushing her fingertips. "It's wonderful to meet you, too. Please just call me Hazel." Hazel managed to mumble. Suddenly, Hazel didn't think this whole feast would be so bad after all. |
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Sept 7, 2014 17:48:25 GMT -5
Post by mariii on Sept 7, 2014 17:48:25 GMT -5
Author's Note: Uh, I didn't even bother to reread this, so it's probably not the best piece of writing in the world. I tried, though! 2A. Write about how your character found his or her Soul Container. "Huh?" Virginia managed to stammer as her eyes fluttered open, adjusting to the harsh afternoon sunlight. A smooth, cool rod-like object lay on Virginia's lap and Virginia stared at it in surprise. She didn't remember putting anything on her lap before falling asleep. As a matter of fact, she didn't remember coming to the beach and falling asleep either. The girl silently shook her head a few times, trying to clear it, before she reached for the object, staring at it in wide-eyed surprise. It was clearly a solid object, but for some reason, Virginia had the feeling that it held the essence of water. She had had the same feeling when she had first seen and used her sword, Brotherhood, but it hadn't been nearly as strong as the feeling was now. "Don't be ridiculous now, Virginia! It can't be some supernatural object like those things that you read about in books! But... just what the heck is this thing?" she whispered to herself, her fingers silently curling around it. It looked something like a unicorn's horn, but everyone knew unicorns didn't exist! Virginia quickly rose to her feet when she heard her mother's voice, calling her home for dinner. "I guess I'll just have to take you home with me. In time, I'm sure I'll be able to figure out your secrets." Virginia whispered to the long horn. Virginia always knew that the horn was special, but she never did realize just how much it would change her life. |
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Sept 7, 2014 19:05:11 GMT -5
Post by mariii on Sept 7, 2014 19:05:11 GMT -5
Author's Note: You guys probably don't really know who the heck Akarui is, but she will be a character in IMH 2. ^-^ 2B. Write about how and why your character joined Team Eternity. Akarui Sakura's face seemed to dissolve into uncertainty for a brief moment, but her expression quickly returned to being as cold and emotionless as ever as she silently walked past the bloody corpse that had just moments ago been a living person. "Well?" she asked, silently folding her arms over her chest as she glared at the Team Eternity grunt standing in front of her, "Have I passed your stupid test yet? Or is killing a man not enough for your standards?" The grunt merely glanced at her before nodding once, clearly frightened by how easily she had just killed the man that had been her "test." Akarui had always been a "no nonsense" type of girl. Her parents had died when she was barely old enough to walk and she had been taken in by a tribe of ninja-like assassins. When the leader of the tribe was poisoned by a rival tribe, fifteen-year-old Akarui had left the group. When she heard of Team Eternity, she had immediately headed to the nearest recruiting location to join. Akarui hadn't thought that Team Eternity would want to test her, though, but it wasn't hard for her to kill a man. After all, she had been trained to kill ever since she was a little girl. Akarui swept past the grunt, heading for the entrance to the Team Eternity building. She stopped momentarily to glance back at the grunt before she entered, her eyes shining with what looked almost like a challenge. "Kindly find someone to dispose of that body, will you?" |
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Sept 14, 2014 11:51:59 GMT -5
Post by mariii on Sept 14, 2014 11:51:59 GMT -5
Author's Note: I don't think anybody's really reading these, but whatever! 3A. Write about your character's biggest regret from before he or she met the other Communicators. I could've saved them... The thought tore through the thirteen-year-old's mind as she hugged her knees to her chest, the Soul Dew clutched tightly in her right hand. Alexandra Mayer, Alex for short, had been haunted by nightmares of her parents' death for months now and, after she and her brother had found the Soul Dew, the nightmares had only gotten more frequent... and more violent. As a matter of fact, Alex had just has another one of those nightmares and now she wouldn't, or couldn't, go back to sleep. The Soul Dew was special. There was absolutely no doubt about it. Earlier that day, Alex had witnessed her brother levitate three pebbles three feet off the ground. Alex herself had somehow managed to turn invisible. Alex silently shivered in the cool night breeze. Had she and Luke found the Soul Dew earlier, could they have prevented their parents' death? Or at least, even if they hadn't found the Soul Dew, they could've been with their parents when they had died. An image flashed back of Alex's parents as she had last seen them, sprawled out in the blood-stained grass. Anita and Tyler Mayer had been killed merely because they believed in something. They had been absolutely and completely defenseless. Alex sighed. I know how to use my dagger and Luke can use his bow and arrows. We could've saved our parents!But they hadn't... and Alex would regret that for the rest of her life. The girl turned to glance at the sleeping form of her twin brother and silently folded her arms over her chest. For now, she had to keep her brother and herself safe. She needed to figure out the Soul Dew's secrets. Then, she would get revenge for the murder of her parents. She would destroy Team Eternity, if it was the last thing she did. |
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Sept 14, 2014 13:53:24 GMT -5
Post by mariii on Sept 14, 2014 13:53:24 GMT -5
Author's Note: Yay, random story about non-heartless Ashburn! 3B. Write about your character's biggest regret from before he or she joined Team Eternity. Even the darkest of demons were not always demons. These words are especially true in the case of Count Ashburn, the Poisoned Rose. He was not always the emotionless beast that you see today. Even Ashburn had his regrets, once upon a time. Nien County was always a beautiful place. Blossoms of various colors sprouted up everywhere. Pokémon played and frolicked in the forests. There were rarely any quarrels and most of the residents were always fairly happy. A sixteen-year-old, the kind-hearted Count Ashburn, known as the Rose, ruled over all of this. Ashburn loved the residents of his county and they, in turn, loved him. In particular, there was one young girl that Ashburn loved and treated like a little sister. This girl's name was Alanna and she was always smiling. One day, however, she grew ill. Nobody in the county thought much about it. It was probably just a cold or something. Ashburn continued to visit Alanna every day. He didn't think much of the disease either. "Ash, I feel really, really sick. Am I going to die?" Alanna would ask. Ashburn would always scoff at the idea. "Don't be silly, Alanna! You've been sick plenty of times before, haven't you? You'll be fine." Ashburn would always reply. Alanna would always give him a strange look as if she didn't believe him. Ashburn always dismissed the idea as a childish fantasy, but he should have realized the truth in Alanna's words. A few months passed. Alanna still remained sick. One day, Ashburn heard that Alanna's condition had reached the level of "Critical." He immediately rushed off to visit the young girl. It was only then when he realized how he should've listened to what Alanna had always said. Ashburn was too late. As he sped into the house, he saw Alanna lying on her small bed, her golden-blonde hair splayed in a fan beneath her head. His eyes went wide with horror as he felt the world spin around him. "I should've listened to her. I should've listened to her. I'm so, so sorry, Alanna." |
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Sept 26, 2014 16:27:27 GMT -5
Post by mariii on Sept 26, 2014 16:27:27 GMT -5
4. Write about your character's biggest dream about the future. If she had been asked what her biggest dream for the future was two months ago, Arietta "Ari" Rei would have responded with one of the cliché answers, like "I want to be famous," or "I want to own a mansion." For Ari, these dreams were even more important than they were to the average child. To her, these dreams would provide a means of acceptance. Her family wouldn't think she was a nobody anymore. However, in recent weeks, Ari has found a dream that is even more important to her: she will do nearly anything to keep her newly-found family together. May 28th, the 137th year of Eternity's Reign
Recently, I've been thinking a lot about what happens after death. I've debated asking Ani-san and Ane-chan, but I don't want them to get any wild ideas. Besides, they might start worrying about me. I'm not wondering because I'm considering suicide or something stupid. I just want to know if we'll still be able to stay together after death: just me, Ani-san, Ane-chan, and Koko-chan... and maybe Crystal-chan, Rozlynn-chan, Kevin-san, and Nora-chan, too.
I wonder, after death, will we still remember everything we know from this life? Is there even an afterlife? Will this afterlife, if there is one, be a happy afterlife? Will we still need to worry about things like Team Eternity? Will Ani-san, Ane-chan, Koko-chan, and I continue being a family? I already know what Koko-chan, Ane-chan, and Ani-san would say about that. "Oh, no. The afterlife is glorious."
I don't know, though. Whatever happens after death, I'm really not so keen to find out. |
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